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April 11th, 2012

Zip’s Last Day Page 03 of 16 Comments about this page

Zip’s Last Day

(R; Crime/Horror) A corrupt FBI agent arrives in Boston to solve what looks like a murder mystery. As he tracks down clues, the case evolves into something much more bizarre. Read the story overview for more behind-the-scenes details.

The 4-row layout is proof positive the Stray Bullets influence. This forced me to focus on each panel’s storytelling. Hopefully each setting is convincing. Wouldn’t want the ghost of Alex Toth haunting my dreams.

The top scene resonated with a lot of my friends, all of whom were burned by selfish employess at the last second.

The police lieutenant is based on Dan DeCarlo.

I don’t like the pointers of my word balloons very much. They’re too uniform, without enough customization per panel. Most are short and curved, when a lot of them should be straight.

Talk Back! Most recent of (2)

Mid-Page Scene Changes

Jesse Farrell | Posted on April 11th, 2012 at 6:57 pm   

Dave, I only call you to complain. (Mostly because there’s so little in your work I need to complain about.)

Switching to an unrelated scene mid-page always seems a little weird to me. It worked in old comics, but there was usually a “Elsewhere” caption or something. Sure, it’s obvious we’re elsewhere on panel three, but it’s not the same effect as cross-cutting in film and, I think, needs a little more to make the transfer seamless. Alan Moore, although his 80s cutting was often fairly precious, was also really good at that kind of thing.

Amazed that cop is based on DeCarlo. He could be any of a million middle-aged guys in the Boston area! Great, real face, not a cookie-cutter comic face.

A word balloon in panel six is misaligned.

(I liked Chris’s Charlie Brown shirt, too).)

re: Mid-Page Scene Changes

David Marshall | Posted on April 12th, 2012 at 11:12 am   

Thanks for the QA work, Jesse. I fixed the panel just now, so no one knows how you stepped up and saved my bacon!

I struggled with the transitions, but ultimately decided that this was clearer than extending scenes purely to make the transition jump to the next page. I was also on a one-man-war against captions, which probably blows away clarity for non-comics snobs. If you’re keeping score, I hated narration but kept the thought balloon.

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